Comp 1 – Writer’s Revision Sheet

Original
(what you wrote)
Revision
(how it changed after feedback)
Explanation/rule
Genre 1 – Did not include conclusion of Interview

“With athletes becoming bigger, faster and stronger, everyday contact sports are facing a problem that is not going away
I concluded the interview with a summary statement.

With each generation athletes seem to be getting bigger, faster, and stronger. This fact presents a huge issue for contact sports
Make each genre unified with a description and some type of conclusion

Sentence structure is very important, especially in the introductions
Genre 2- Advertisement should include evidence on why audience should purchase items (factual information). Make sure you use alignment and repetition or some type of creative word sequence.
I included statistics on how many youth athletes suffer concussions every year for ethos and pathos
I made sure everything was lined up real neat so it looked professional but memorable at the same time also included catch phrases.
I should change the way I write each time my genre changes to keep audience intrigued in the project
Genre 3- Include pictures to give the audience something visual to appreciate; it will help keep their attention. Connect relevance of genre to audience
I made sure to give a memorable picture of each athlete I discussed so the audience had a nice visual as well as a write up
I wrote my genre in a way that would establish some emotional appeal towards my audience.
If it is not just a factual piece in the genre I should always try to gain some emotional appeal from the audience. Visual representation is also key
Professional Genre 2- Do not include “I” in a professional genre. Lean more towards a professional write up than an opinionated write up
I made sure that I took out any references that related directly to me as the author of the piece. I included an alternative way of approaching the issue instead of picking sides.
When writing a professional piece it is good to include the counter argument when trying to persuade the audience however I should try to sound more professional through evidence and facts rather than just opinion
Professional Genre 3- In this genre try to summarize the whole piece
I made sure that I summarized all the main points that I hit in the entire piece not just ones that I felt were necessary.
In any conclusion you should always summarize all the main points.